Three Conclusions

Below, are three versions of a conclusion for the same assignment. None of them is perfect. Have a look at the three and describe what you think are the specific merits of each. Is there one conclusion that you think is best?

The topic will probably be familiar to you now, from the introductions activity; this familiarity should help you to judge the effectiveness of the conclusion.

Here are some questions for judging a good conclusion:

  • Is the conclusion an effective summary of the main points?
  • Is it the right length for the assignment?
  • Does it leave you with a clear impression of the author’s argument, express their reasoned opinion, or indicate the significance of the argument?

Essay question: ‘Outline how and why audiences have been researched in terms of “effects” and “uses”.’

1. In conclusion, it is easy to see that there is a relationship between the media and the audience. There are, however, varying research methods used in terms of ‘effects’ and ‘uses’ when looking at the audience. The methods used in the research of media effects on the audience are often stringent and formal; the research by Bandura in a laboratory environment is a clear example of this and, hence, can have a bearing on the results, as they are not in a more natural environment. On the other hand, the research methods used when investigating how the audience uses the media and how the media use the audience are more qualitative. Such research has tended to use interviews and observations made in a ‘real’ and natural environment and the results, therefore, are often more accurate and meaningful but harder to quantify. The research into the audience in terms of ‘effects’ and ‘uses’ can give an insight into audiences’ behaviour, daily lives and media influences. For instance, such research has considered the effect of violent videos on children’s behaviour or attitude. Contrasting research provides insights into how the audience uses the media in everyday life, in their routines and conversations, for example in Trinidad. Finally, it can give an indication of how the audience can influence what the media produce, such as contemporary topics in The Archers in Afghanistan. This is how and why the audience is researched in terms of ‘effects’ and ‘uses’.

This discusses the key terms of the question, and summarizes the key points made in the assignment about the relationships between the media and audiences and different ways of researching this. It addresses the ‘how’ of the question.

However, it doesn’t clearly address the issue of ‘why’. This could be an indication that this crucial part of the question hasn’t been addressed in the essay’s main body, or that the student simply forgot to include this in their conclusion. It is also loosely phrased, e.g. ‘The methods used in the research of media effects on the audience are often stringent and formal; the research by Bandura in a laboratory environment is a clear example of this and as a result can have a bearing on the results’ (42 words), could be ‘Media effects research, such as Bandura’s laboratory work, is often formal and controlled, which affects the result’ (17 words).

2. In conclusion, varying research methods used to research audience ‘effects’ and ‘uses’ clearly influence the outcomes. Stringent methods like Bandura’s work one way; qualitative investigation on audiences uses another. Case studies like the audience use of soaps in Trinidad and Afghanistan show clearly how audiences interact with the material that they have, and influence the story lines and methods of telling. This is how and why the audience is researched in terms of ‘effects’ and ‘uses’.

This is concise. It sticks to the point. It summarizes the ‘how’ part of the question, and hints at the answer to the ‘why’ part, giving an indication of which the author considers is the stronger.

3. In conclusion, by looking at research into audience ‘uses’ and ‘effects’, it is easy to see that there is a relationship between the media and the audience. Research methods vary and themselves have different effects. The methods used in the research of media effects on the audience are often stringent and formal, such as the laboratory research by Bandura, with the unnatural setting having a bearing on the results. On the other hand, the research methods used when investigating how the audience uses the media and how the media use the audience are more qualitative. Such research may use interviews and observations made in a ‘real’ and ‘natural’ environment and, therefore, the results are often more accurate and meaningful but harder to quantify. The research into the audience in terms of ‘effects’ and ‘uses’ can then give an insight into how the audience is affected. For instance, we see how consumption of certain media, such as violent videos, may affect children’s behaviour or attitude. Contrastingly, we see also how the audience uses the media in everyday life, in their routines and conversations, such as in Trinidad. Finally, we can also see how the audience can affect what the media produce, such as the development of relevant and contemporary topics in The Archers in Afghanistan. The Archers has now become part of Afghan national life. The characters are so well-known that real public figures have been known to compare each other to them. When the Taliban controlled the country they allowed New Home New Life to continue – though a group did turn up at the studios in Kabul demanding to see what was going on (Thompson, 2010). This is how and why the audience is researched in terms of ‘effects’ and ‘uses’.

Source: M. Thompson (2010) ‘Nation Speaking Peace Unto Nation: The BBC’s Global Mission’, available at: http://www.chathamhouse.org.uk/files/16574_110510thompson.pdf (accessed 5 September 2010).

In some ways, this is quite a comprehensive conclusion. It fully addresses the ‘how’ of the question, and recaps the material from the main body of the essay.

However, it goes too far with the recapping and veers into discussion that should have remained in the essay’s main body. At the end, it commits the cardinal sin of adding new material. Although it is related to a previous discussion, Conclusion 3 provides a short anecdote about New Home New Life, which should have been in the main body of the essay. The final statement, ‘This is how and why the audience is researched in terms of “effects” and “uses”,’ does not follow on from the previous sentence – in part, of course, because the previous sentence is new material.

In the end, it fails explicitly to address the ‘why’ part of question – although answers to ‘why’ are implicit in much of the conclusion.

 

Of the three conclusions, which did you think worked best? On balance, we think that Conclusion 1 was best, but that each had merit as well as problems. Look again at the tutor comments: if you were writing this essay, which elements of each of the conclusions would you use for your final draft?